Editing Spectrum artifact paper (2/21/09)

The other day, I had my very first meeting with Ms. Murray and found that what I thought to be an alright paper was missing quite a few details. One simply fixed “error” was that my paper had no pictures in it. I had not given much thought to this before seeing as the paper already more than met the page requirements and because I was looking at what their page looked like all the time so it didn’t occur to me to let others actually see samples of it. The next thing we talked about was that although my paper had a page-of-a-paragraph (something that will need to be cut a few times) of description on the artifact, there was no analysis. Along with adding that, I will also need to think of a better thesis statement that encompasses the whole of my paper. I asked about my works cited page and found that although I was not quoting Spectrum’s website verbatim, it still needed to be cited. Some other things that were suggested were to add an interview and avoid contractions. All-in-all, I most definitely think this short meeting was very beneficial and will help my paper immensely.
-Julia St. John