We are group F, and here is what we typed up for Michelle Hanson's Playing in the MUD: A Newbie’s Experience with Online Gaming essay…
What do you think the thesis of the essay is?
As everyone can see, there is no clear thesis, but our group decided to put a few sentences from the last paragraph together to make one for the author…
I am attempting to compose a piece of substance that readers may enjoy—insiders and outsiders— recording the customs, rituals, language, and traditions of the MUDded society.
Which voices (colors) stood out in this essay? How did the author incorporate secondary sources? Where did they place them in the essay? In your opinion, does the author of this essay strike a good balance between all three? Do the voices of informants stand on their own, or are they overpowered?
We feel that the color green probably most stood out to us as outsiders of the group. Although the author did not exactly go out and find books, websites, and articles, she did include insider words, phrases, and jargon from the actual game and explained them quite nicely. We fell that for the most part the author strikes a good balance between all three but there are a lot of times when e find her to be rather redundant. Although there was really only one informant (besides the Osh guy who talked to her a few times), this boyfriend seems to add good input to the composition.
How is the essay organized? Did the author use a particular method to organize the essay? Is the organization reader friendly?
This essay is primarily organized with subcategories. We would say that this essay is reader friendly. The author uses sarcastic comments, well-informed conversations, and personal experiences to keep the reader’s attention and we would say it works!
In your group's opinion, what are the strengths and weaknesses of this essay?
Strengths: subheadings, sarcastic commentary, interviews,
Weaknesses: repetitive nature, conversations a little hard to follow, getting to personal (loosing style of paper) at the end
-Group F
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